Friday, March 26, 2010

Divine Alchemy


One soul
Base, defiled
Poured into
The fires of Redemption

Pain, death, hate and fear
Filthy, useless ashes
Fall away, leaving
Gold

15 comments:

sg beatty said...

this is very deep and well thought out...nice writing

sg beatty said...

I also liked it the second time.
Asctually I liked it more the second time I read it.
You would have made a great Alchemist

Lilibeth said...

I love this. It's a perfect twist to the prompt.

Elisha said...

I like these little mini-poems, you've been doing, You have to be very selective with your words and organization on these tiny poems if you want them to say as much as you are making them say. Great job.

Short Poems said...

Beautiful lines and original :)

Marinela

Stan Ski said...

A heart of Gold in all of us...

Ariel said...

This is beautiful. Redemption from all the sins and the conversion to 'gold', very thought provoking lines.

Dee Martin said...

Refiner's fire :) Beautiful!

Tumblewords: said...

Nicely done!

Thomma Lyn said...

Oooh, this is lovely -- captivating, the notion of burning away pain, death, hate and fear to leave gold, which I take as love. :)

Understanding Alice said...

Its funny how this prompt has for so many of us caused us to write about God... I very much liked yours :)

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

Nicely done - redemptive fire and and turning baser stuff to gold.

Andy Sewina said...

Nicely! I like the way you wrote this!!

Denise Moncrief said...

Fire purifies and refines, burns away the dross and leaves the heart of gold. Nice take on the prompt.

one more believer said...

refiner's fire...but ouch!!! it's got that everyday hot burn to it as well.....