Wednesday, August 25, 2010

Wither Like the Grass


One thin man climbs the hill, slipping and sliding as he steps on boulders, grunting as his body hits the ground once again. With the last of his strength, he crawls to the top, and stands staring into the black depths of the water so far below him.

As he falls through the air, a sunbeam bounces off the sea below, and makes a halo around his smooth head, and his wrinkled face. He calls out, in one last fleeting, flying prayer, the soulless roar of a man who earned and fought, but never lived. The hollow cry of a creature who abstained from love.

16 comments:

Deborah said...

Powerfully written ...well done!

J.A. O'Sullivan said...

Gorgeous . . .

K said...

These last two lines:
"He calls out, in one last fleeting, flying prayer, the soulless roar of a man who earned and fought, but never lived. The hollow cry of a creature who abstained from love."
are amazing!

Beautiful

Toi said...

a heartbreaker this one. the end
was unexpected. written with
gentleness.

Coraline J. Thompson said...

I'm with K, the last two lines... perfection.

Great work!

The World of Lost Souls

Angel said...

How sad!

Ann (bunnygirl) said...

This made me sad, but yes, there are those who never risk their hearts. Chasing after the material things will never bring true contentment.

Pan said...

I love the imagery you conjured in this! and the beauty you captured in a moment so tragic.

"As he falls through the air, a sunbeam bounces off the sea below, and makes a halo around his smooth head, and his wrinkled face."

Nice writing. :-)

Bobbie Sandlin said...

Very deep. Sad and yet powerful. Love the imagery.

Christine said...

Tight and loaded with imagery. And yes, those last two sentences amazed me!

nanka said...

Well said,a tragic picture with sensitive thoughts and words...

gautami tripathy said...

Deep and powerful..

reaching out

Ramesh Sood said...

Somehow can't comprehend such a thing and have never understood.. but you told it well..heavy stuff..

Do visit me for a laugh if you wish to have one..Earlier to that is 3ww.

Lanie said...

powerful and beautiful.

Anonymous said...

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Anonymous said...

Great post, I am almost 100% in agreement with you